Thursday, May 28, 2015

Rush

They sat in the grass, in the dark, behind the hedge. Beyond was the revelry.
 I hate them all.
You don't have to for me.
 You're not missing anything.
 Except another chance to belong.


https://unchartedblogdotorg.wordpress.com/2015/05/28/six-sentence-stories-2/

31 comments :

  1. This said so much in such brief little sentences. Its so brief yet it says everything it needs to convey! Awesome entry! Thanks so much for linking in! I hope you had fun with it and it wasnt too pressured! ITS THURSDAY! ITS THURSDAY?!

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    1. And brief sentences make is easy to write six! I either like sparse or I like getting to six quick. :)
      Thanks so much for starting this up, Ivy! I LOVE it!

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  2. That packs a punch with so little words. . . Impressive.

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  3. So much in so few words. I felt a sadness reading this. I really like this six sentence writing opportunity.

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    1. I do, too! Thank you for your support.

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  4. Amazing how much can be said in so few words.

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  5. I love writing like this Sarah! So little said... and yet so much! I understood where this was coming from, I've been on that side of the hedge more times than not. Great story, and so glad you decided to add your six sentences today! :-)

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  6. The word that comes to mind is...pithy. Well done.

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    1. That's one of those words I know but don't know. I looked it up to be sure. Yes, I think so. I like spare.

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  7. How effective your writing is to reflect the mood of the subject character. Some may not get it but those who have been in that pit of despair will.

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    1. Not sure I had the conscious intention, but I see what you mean, and I'm glad liked it.

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  8. I'm not sure if I understand your story accurately, but it seems poignant. I need 'another chance to belong.'

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    1. You probably understand as you should. There's no wrong.

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  9. Very well done, Im not sure I could write in 6 sentences.

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    1. I prefer to write within limits. I feel overwhelmed by complete freedom.

      Feeling like that's a possible life motto that I'm not sure I want to embrace.

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    2. Once upon a time, I had the same thoughts as you, Piper. . . But, I am finding I might quite like the limits, as you do, Sarah. I am excited to do this again. ;) It is also interesting to see what everyone else comes up with.

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  10. I know this.
    You captured that fiery feeling in the pit of my stomach so well in just a mere 6 sentences. Bravo. xoxo

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    1. Thank you so much for this, Kim. I'm glad it was meaningful.

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  11. This really does say a lot in 6 short sentences, wow. Love it!

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  12. I'd sit on your side of the hedge :)

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  13. Wow Sarah this is amazing! Seriously the feelings that you convey in just six sentences blows me away! Bravo!

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    1. Thank you so much for this affirmation!

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  14. Excellent -- i remember that outsider feeling that you capture here.

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